CERRECTION

1. Using your edited printouts, update your blogs with corrections, showing the before-and-after versions of your writing.

Before Cerrection:

I have a 6-year-old daughter. First of all, She bring great happiness for me. But sometimes you also felt a little angry, tired, or frastrate in some situations with her. You need a large of patiences to deal with her. First, She like snacks rather than dinner.  I almost talk about this issue everyday with her, but there are few effect to her. This make me very frastrate. Second, she spend much time on watching TV and playing games. If  I turn off TV or ipad after a long time fight with her, she perhaps throws a temper tanturm to me. Third, she is a too active girl. So I must pay more attention to her. When she started learning to walk at about 1.5-year-old, I had to have child proof the house so as to avoid hurting her by somethings. Now after playing outside, maybe she would go home with black and blue on her arms and legs.

Yesterday, we went to visit CN Tower in the morning. we arrived at entrance at 9:45 and waited for our classmates. after taking a group photos, We came into ticket office and lined up at the ticket counter for checking in. But after the staff checked  our ticket, security guard rejected us to visit CN Tower because they thought our ticket that purchased online is invalid due to agent which sold tickets to my teacher. Our teacher discussed  the matter with the staff. we had to waiting at  ticket office for a long time. but at last they still insisted on their opinion. If we want visit CN tower ,we must make up price difference, It is about $20. It is unacceptable for us. It is very disappointed for us. teacher apologized to us and promised refunding ticket fee to us. He said we had to cancelled visiting CN Tower, but we can visit other places. When My teacher had to stay there and handle the matter. we left from CN tower and visited steam Whistle Brewery and Railway museum.  first ,Then we go to Harbourfront centre. walking beside lake and breathing fresh air is a delight for me.

After cerrectioin:

I have a 6-year-old daughter. First of all, she brings to me great happiness. But sometimes I also feel a little angry, tired, or frustrated in some situations with her. I need a lot of patience to deal with her. First, she likes snacks rather than dinner. I talk to her about this issue almost everyday. but it has little effect on her. This makes me very frustrated. Second, she spends a lot of time watching the TV or playing games. If I turn off TV or iPAD after a long time fighting with her, she would throw a temper tantrum at me. Third, she is an active girl. So I have to pay close attention to her. When she started learning to walk at about 1.5-year-old, I had child proof the house. Now after playing outside, she would still come with bruise on her arms and legs.

An Unusual Experience At CN Tower

Yesterday, we went to visit CN tower in the morning. We arrived at entrance at 9:45 and waited for our classmates. After taking photo, we went to ticket office and lined up at the ticket counter. But after the staff checked our tickets, the security guard rejected them because they thought our tickets that our teacher purchased online were invalid. Our teacher discussed the matter with the staff. We had to wait there for a long time. But they would not budge. If we want visit CN Tower, we must made up the price difference, which is about $20. It was unacceptable for us. It is a disappointment. our teacher apologiazed to us and promised a refund. He said we had to cancell visiting CN Tower, but we can visit other places. We left CN Tower and visited the Steam Whistle Brewery and Railway Museum. Then, we go to Harbourfront Centre, walking beside lake and breathing in the fresh air was a delight for me.